To-do Phrases
Sometimes, it is okay to tell, but not always. In Deep POV, the goal is to show what is happening and not tell or explain the reason to the reader. Just show the evidence and the reaction.
To-do phrases, also known as full infinitive or to-infinitive phrases, are used to tell (explain) why a character does something (this or that).
These to-do phrases often replace “in order to” phrases.
Most to-do phrases start with because, by, to, and with, followed by an action verb or adverb, but not always. With practice, you will spot these unwanted to-do telling/explaining phrases.
You cannot reword every instance of a to-do phrase (full infinitive or to-infinitive) in your manuscript, but you will find many you can.
- because
- by
- to
- with
because he | to explore | to sleep |
because of | to find | to stead |
because she | to focus | to stop |
because the | to get | to take |
because they | to grab | to tell |
by her | to have | to thank |
by his | to hear | to touch |
by the | to keep | to wait |
by their | to look | to watch |
in order to | to make | with her |
to accept | to open | with his |
to ask | to reach | with the |
to be | to rush | with their |
to do | to see | |
to explode | to sit |
Or.
To-do phrases (infinitives) can be made worse by starting the phrase with the word forms of “begin, start, want, turn, and try.”
These phrases make a sentence wordy and ambiguous, a common issue with novice writers.
began to run | starts to cry | turning to look |
begin to run | tried to run | turns to look |
beginning to run | tries to run | want to cry |
begins to run | try to run | wanted to cry |
start to cry | trying to run | wanting to cry |
started to cry | turn to look | wants to cry |
starting to cry | turned to look |
If something is happening, cut the wordiness and show what is happening.
Or.
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The more you avoid these pesky to-do (full infinitive, to-infinitive) explaining/telling phrases, the tighter your writing will become. Doing this will also enhance the plot.
Yes, some writers use the “begin to, start to, want to” phrase to show a pause in the action (motion).
But eliminating most of these telling, wordy phrases will make your writing more to the point and more engaging for the reader.